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Hogwarts Too Exposed Chapter 23

Hogwarts Exposed: Hooch: om nom nom
Hogwarts Exposed has trouble with pacing, to put it mildly. In the first fic, Chapter 23 had so little going on that the author himself forgot all about it. At least there we had Harry and Hermione's wedding still impending, so we knew that the story was heading for a conclusion of sorts. The end of the last chapter of Too Exposed, by contrast, leaves us with an overwhelming feeling that there's nowhere to go from here. We've had the plot-hole-ridden time travel to bring Jamie back from the dead. We've had the Caitlin/Emily thing for which this story is rightly infamous. We've had a sex scene that was every bit as bad as you'd expect, after which Moaning Myrtle appears because apparently she can access the Room of Requirement.

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